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Writing Assignment #4
Peer Review
Summary of assignment
● Task: The peer review analysis asks you to complete the following:
o Select a personal research narrative essay from another student in your class.
o Write an essay with an introduction, body, and conclusion. The essay will answer
several questions about the essay. The questions are listed below.
● Length: 600-900 words
● Format: No sources will be cited in this paper, so no particular citation format will be
What You Will Submit
You will include two documents when you submit the assignment. You will submit both the
essay that you reviewed as well as your peer review of the essay when you submit the
Questions to Answer When Writing Your Peer Review
In writing the peer review, please read the paper carefully and answer the following questions
as well as you can in your essay.
Please do not simply list the questions and write answers to them. Rather, write an essay with
an introduction, body, and conclusion in which you incorporate the various issues mentioned
below into the essay.
You might, for example, divide the body of your essay into topic and thesis statement, sources
used, clarity of narrative, and grammar. This is just an example of topics into which you could
divide your paper. You might choose a very different set of topics.
1. Is the student’s research journey apparent when reading the personal research narrative?
2. Does the student describe steps he or she took while researching? Note how the essay from
Bergmann does this on page 162. Does the student do this?
3. Is the reader clear about what he or she already knew about the subject before
4 Is the reader clear about what he or she learned about the subject while researching?
5. Bergmann says, “Although the personal research narrative does not take the form of an argument,
often an argument underlies it or emerges from it” (p. 160). Can you see the underlying argument the
writer is making in the paper?
6. Bergmann says on page 161 that “transitions and cues to your purpose and to your response to
sources are particularly important for your readers…” (p. 161). Does the writer incorporate
transitions and cues in this manner?
7. Does the essay have a strong introductory paragraph and a clear thesis statement?
8. Does the writer use the personal pronoun “I”? Remember this is a personal research
narrative, so the writer should use the pronoun “I.”
9. Does each paragraph begin a new topic, perhaps a new topic in the research journey?
10. Are there a sufficient number of sources integrated into the essay to make the personal research
narrative rich and robust? The instructions ask for at least 10 sources.
11. Are at least six of the sources scholarly sources? The instructions ask that at least six be scholarly
12. Are any terms in need of clarification or definition? In other words, as a reader, did you need
clarification or definition of any terms or concepts in the essay?
13. Can you identify some concepts or strategies in They Say/I Say that were incorporated into this
personal research narrative?
Your peer review should be 600-900 words in length. Please answer the questions
listed above and be as thorough as you feel is necessary.
Effects of Eggs and Health
Personal Research Narrative
Effects of Eggs and Health
Brianna Rivera
University of Maryland University College
Effects of Eggs and Health
The topic I have decided would be very interesting to do research on is on this food that
most of us people consume on the daily, which are eggs. I have heard multiple different
statements on whether eggs are good for you or bad for you, and surprisingly enough I have
heard many different answers from multiple cases I have looked up and found in the UMUC One
Search Library. I had found 5 different sources that should hopefully be able to help me
understand how eggs are affecting us and if it is positive or negative, maybe even both.
The first source I have found was “An Egg a Day may be A okay.” This first source date
back to April 1, 2013 so it is a bit older. The article begins speaking on how an egg a day may be
okay for us rather than harm us. “Protein-rich and high in vitamin D, the egg was once revered as
an ideal food. Concerns over its high cholesterol content—210 milligrams (mg) in a large egg,
almost all of it in the yolk—prompted some to question whether the risks of eating eggs might be
greater than the benefit.” (Kurtzweil, P. (1998). This is one of the most well-known sentences
that I and most other people truly know eggs by if you ask them. Yes, eggs are known to be a
very high source of protein, but also has a very high amount of cholesterol in just the yolk itself.
Leading to the fact that the excessive eating of eggs and high amounts of cholesterol will
eventually lead to heart problems in the future. “A new analysis of studies done on egg
consumption and risk of heart attack or stroke had come to a fine conclusion that eggs do not
increase the risk of heart attack or stroke.” (Kurtzweil, P. (1998).
In this study, they had some participants eat about up to 10 eggs per week while some
even ate 15-20, and no negative effects had been seen. Though this is a good sign, The American
Heart Association continues to recommend only consuming no more than 300 mg of cholesterol
a day.
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The second source I had found on my topic is titled “Egg Consumption and
cardiovascular disease according to diabetic status: The PREDIMED study.” This study was also
very similar-to the first one I did as it is speaking on Cardiovascular disease as well as testing
participants who do and do not have diabetes. Again, it states how eggs are a major source of
cholesterol and the results of the participants was that “Low to moderated egg consumption was
not associated with an increased CVD risk in diabetic or non-diabetic individuals at high
cardiovascular risk.” (Toledo, E. (2017). I still do believe that over consumption of eggs may
lead to future problems if not taking care of your body properly and remaining to eat healthy.
The next source that I had found was called “Eggs might help your heart, not harm it.”
(Eggs might help your heart, not harm it. (2018). This article was very confusing for me, as it
may be for you reading this as well. I have conducted this research trying to find out why eggs
are bad for you, but so far, the articles I have found are stating that they may have those effects,
but will never actually cause heart disease. This article states how eggs do not raise any type of
risk for heart disease and may even protect against it? This article leaves me questioning the
topic a bit more than it had before, but so far, I am seeing that eggs really do not cause heart
disease from their increased cholesterol content in the yolks.
The fourth article I had found begins to lead towards what and how eggs can be bad for
your health, and not in a cholesterol or heart disease manor. “Lead exposure to children from
consumption of backyard chicken eggs.” This states that those who have backyard chickens,
especially in larger cities, have found that these chickens have a larger pathway to lead exposure,
especially in children. They had found that “Lead contamination and consumption rates have
increased in children, and that soil lead remediation prior to chicken ownership may reduce lead
Effects of Eggs and Health
exposure from backyard eggs.” (Rosenbaum, M. (2018). This means that the household egg lead
concentration was positively correlated with coop soil lead concentrations.
The next source I had found was called “Safer eggs: Laying the Groundwork.” This
research case had been able to find that eggs can cause some health hazards which can include
the bacteria Salmonella. It is very important for eggs to always be cooked at a high temperature
to kill any type of bacteria that may be in it. “In recent years, the egg has gained notoriety as a
carrier of dangerous disease-causing Salmonella bacteria and as a food laden with arteryclogging cholesterol. Many of its best features–like ease of use, good taste, functionality, and
low cost–have been lost in the stir.” (Kurtzweil, Paula) It is very important to make sure the
readiness of eggs is always safe and smart when brining out to grocery stores, remember to
always refrigerate eggs and cook them at high temperatures to kill any bacteria. Doing these
matters will be sure to prevent any type of sickness from eggs that can make us very sick.
In addition to this last article I wrote about, including salmonella in eggs, I found another
source called “Consumer Shell Egg Consumption and Handling Practices: Results from a
National Survey” as it is important to know how to properly handle and care for eggs when
consuming them. Throughout the U.S. there have been many cases of salmonella outbreaks from
the infection being on the shells of eggs. As always, it is recommended to have eggs refrigerated
at all-times and to always wash your hands after cracking the shells. The bacteria can be on the
outer shell, so if you do not wash your hands after cracking eggs, it is known as an unsafe
practice. Cooking, as said before, it is very important to cook the eggs thoroughly and make sure
to not have any soft or runny whites of the eggs. “As recommended, most consumers stored
shell eggs in the refrigerator (99%) for no more than 3 to 5 weeks (97.6%). After cracking eggs,
48.1% of respondents washed their hands with soap and water.” (Kosa, K. (2015).
Effects of Eggs and Health
The next article I found to go along with my egg and health research is one called
“Unscrambling Eggs” (Liebman, Bonnie (2015). It seems to be that there was an article speaking
on cholesterol and how it is bad for you, and that reducing high blood cholesterol may lower the
known risk for heart disease. “It wasn’t about eggs. But since eggs contain more cholesterol than
most other foods, eggs had gotten more than their share of the blame, even though foods rich in
saturated fat (like red meat, cheese, and butter) are bigger culprits.” (Liebman, 2015). This
statement is very true from mine and others’ points of view because I was convinced that eggs
were one of the causes for heart disease, thankfully now looking further into this research topic,
eggs are not a cause and they are still decently healthy for you. I did find though that “Women
with type 2 diabetes who ate at least one egg a day had a 44 percent higher risk of heart disease
than those who ate less than one egg per week. Worse yet, men with diabetes who ate at least one
egg a day had double the risk—a 100 percent higher risk—of heart disease.” Yet they do not
exactly know why men are at higher risk. (Luc Djoussé)
For additional information and another important source, there is one called “Scientific
Opinion on the Public Health risks of table eggs due to deterioration and development of
pathogens.” Salmonella is known to be one of the only pathogens causing a major risk of egg
diseases. As this has been mentioned in multiple studies, “It should be noted that the absolute
risk is greater for uncooked meals compared to lightly cooked meals. An effective way to
minimize any increase in risk during extended storage is to keep the eggs refrigerated both at
retail and the household. Regarding egg spoilage, such events strongly depend on the hygienic
conditions of egg production and practices of egg handling, including storage times and
temperatures.” (Scientific Opinion, 2014).
Effects of Eggs and Health
In addition to finding contaminated eggs, the article “Eggs of Urban Chickens found
Contaminated” (2019.) has more information on as to the fact of more backyard chickens have
been being exposed to lead contamination and is continuing to be found in young children. It is
very important to always test your chicken coops soil to make sure there is no lead and if there is,
to replace it to protect your child’s health, as lead exposure in children can harm a child’s
The last source that I found to be important to incorporate into this writing piece is called
“Considering the benefits of egg consumption for older people at risk of sarcopenia.” (Smith, A
(2016). Sarcopenia is widely known to be a health issue for older people and is known to cause
malnutrition and frailty. Sarcopenia will decrease muscle mass and make everyday a bit of
struggle for those dealing with this. It has been found that eggs are a very inexpensive and very
high in protein and are a very important and acceptable meal for older people. “Encouraging both
those approaching older age and older people to include eggs more frequently, as part of a
healthy, balanced diet and in addition to physical activity, could help them maintain their muscle
strength and function, thereby preserving their functional capacity and reducing morbidity,
mortality and healthcare costs associated with sarcopenia.” (Smith, A (2016).
Overall, reading these sources has helped answer my main question if eggs are bad for
your health, and from what I have found, they are not and do not cause heart disease, but there
are always other health risks like lead exposure and salmonella that may appear in eggs if not
taken care of properly. Eggs have their benefits and are very high in protein for those who need
it, and they may have their risks if not being smart about raising chickens and not cooking them
at a high enough temperature. This research study has helped me a ton with learning about eggs
and I encourage others to read this as well, if curious.
Effects of Eggs and Health
APA References:
An egg a day may be A-Okay. (2013). Harvard Heart Letter: From Harvard Medical School, 23(8), 8.
Retrieved from
Díez-Espino, J., Basterra-Gortari, F. J., Salas-Salvadó, J., Buil-Cosiales, P., Corella, D., Schröder, H., …
Toledo, E. (2017). Egg consumption and cardiovascular disease according to diabetic status: The
PREDIMED study. Clinical Nutrition (Edinburgh, Scotland), 36(4), 1015–1021.
Eggs might help your heart, not harm it. (2018). Harvard Men’s Health Watch, 23(1), 8. Retrieved from
Leibler, J. H., Basra, K., Ireland, T., McDonagh, A., Ressijac, C., Heiger-Bernays, W., … Rosenbaum, M.
(2018). Lead exposure to children from consumption of backyard chicken eggs. Environmental
Research, 167, 445–452.
Kurtzweil, P. (1998). Safer eggs: Laying the groundwork. FDA Consumer, 32(5), 10. Retrieved from
Kosa, K. M., Cates, S. C., Bradley, S., Godwin, S., & Chambers, D. (2015). Consumer Shell Egg
Consumption and Handling Practices: Results from a National Survey. Journal of Food Protection, 78(7),
LIEBMAN, B. (2015). Unscrambling Eggs. Nutrition Action Health Letter, 42(5), 9–11. Retrieved from
Scientific Opinion on the public health risks of table eggs due to deterioration and development of
pathogens. (2014). EFSA Journal, 12(7), 1–147.
Eggs of Urban Chickens Found Contaminated. (2019). USA Today Magazine, 147(2886), 8. Retrieved
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